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You're so brave and strong as you
looked to me; expecting to see strength and iron.
I lied so well to give you that.
You never had to see my tears run
through your mother's hair to her blouse.

I placed the tickets in your tiny hand, so cold.
I never cared for baseball,
but how could I say no
when that's all you said you wanted?
You never did ask for much.

The soaked dirt encases my suit
but I cannot find it in me to move
The world freezes spins for my mind
How could I protect you
from what I could not see?

My selfish heart begs you here
I'd trade the world for you
to ask why, instead of me;
for your tears instead of mine;
for you in place of me.

It rained.
O God, it rained.
©2006-2008 *Dagonus
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This... is actually a recurring nightmare of mine. So be gentle on me here. I thought maybe putting it down and out might stop it. It doens't happen that often, but its happened more than that a few times. Every few weeks.
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*Starkadder:iconStarkadder: Jul 22, 2006, 12:15:29 AM
i think it's very powerful
lovely even...
It's vague, but that's what gives it its power. It makes the reader think, reread, and think again.
I like it VERY much, especially the last two lines

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God save me from my friends. I can protect myself from my enemies.
*Dagonus:iconDagonus: Jul 22, 2006, 12:27:08 PM
Thank you. I couldn't have written it less vague if I wanted to, so I'm glad you like it how it is. I hope it isn't so vague as to not be understood though?

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-Dagonus

Beware the new American Gods; Safety and Efficiency. In their names we will be made slaves.

I'm sure glad I wasn't an abortion. How about you?

"Good timber does not grow with ease; the stronger the wind, the stronger the trees."
*Starkadder:iconStarkadder: Jul 24, 2006, 4:46:32 PM
i would say "enough" is understood ^_^

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God save me from my friends. I can protect myself from my enemies.
*Dagonus:iconDagonus: Jul 24, 2006, 7:22:13 PM
Good :) I'm glad then.

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-Dagonus

Beware the new American Gods; Safety and Efficiency. In their names we will be made slaves.

I'm sure glad I wasn't an abortion. How about you?

"Good timber does not grow with ease; the stronger the wind, the stronger the trees."